Have i over done it

Before you start. What is the first thing you notice and what is the first wrong thing/ something you would change is

I wanted to push for more more more. More color. More value difference. More this more that.are values and the lineart ok. Any mistakes obvious. Is the gesture okay. Have i overdone it with the first 2 pictures (very dark very red.)

Any resources you know that could help me get better.

Which one do you prefer 1 2 3 (or even 4)?